Opinions wanted please

[Wolf]

An unfortunate side effect of working very long on a production (video or book) is no longer being able to see it with fresh eyes.

I’ve been editing and reworking a video for youtube for some time now.
(The ‘new project’ I have previously hinted at)

It is very nearly finished (a few more tweaks and finer edits are still required) and I showed it to my wife who likes it except for some words used she thinks are too ‘intellectual’ for a Sasquatch.

Part of me agrees yet part of me doesn’t think it matters in the context (and I cannot think of a better word to use than ‘transgressions’).

What do you guys think?
(Please do not share this link around as it is ‘unlisted’ because it is still not quite ready to be public… thank you)

https://youtu.be/9eKI9ZGPbBs

[ripperton]

Who wrote that Wolf ? The whole dialogue is very "intellectual" so a word like transgressions is not out of place.
I for one can say hominids are 10 times more intelligent than we are anyway.

[thehairyone]

Gday Wolf , I really like it , the word "transgressions " is perfect in my opinion , whos to say that they aren't just as smart as us ( or smarter ),
ive known people who couldn't use that word .
As usual you don't disappoint
Cheers Greg

[Wolf]

Thanks guys.
I wrote the words, created the art, animated it, voiced the Sasquatch, etc.

[bassplyr]

Nope! Transgressions doesn't sound a bit out of place. Its fantastic as is.

Btw, im loving the book. How do i give a positive review if i was one of those who got the free download and didnt go through kindle? I'd love to give a great review that it deserves.

[Wolf]

Thanks mate... in a few months I will be placing it for free on Amazon and asking people to 'buy' it again from there in order to leave a review.

In the meantime you can post one in this thread or via email if you like... I need some for the cover